I saw life fleeting rapidly
Before my very eyes
Therefore problems coming at me
Like summer time with annoying flies
Life can be very bright
Like the sun on a summer day
Oh, such a pretty sight
When life is lived in full and there is no other way
*I wrote this when I was in 8th grade, so I want to get your opinions of what you think.
Signing off,
Sophia
its really good! I like how you describe the little things.
What a beautiful poem indeed!!! I strongly believe that the beauty of poetry in general, and one of its particular attributes is the fact that the length of a poem is by no means an indication of its quality, and depth of meaning. This is perfectly manifested in "Life". The mind of an 8th grader, so young and tender and at the same time so active, sharp and focused.
"I saw life fleeting rapidly before my very eyes", yes life is so short compared with the concept of infinity and eternity, and living each day with enthusiasm and passion is something we all should do every day. It is a choice we have to make daily!!!